Tommy 18 Posted March 3, 2020 (edited) ‘I was like every other child.’ “Kei! Quickly!” Cried the medics, their frantic voices struggling above a furious storm. A lanky, hooded figure shouldered through the flap of a cramped tent as it billowed with the rain. The tent was damp and lit by a smattering of wax-dribbled candles; dim lights swayed with the raging storm, shadows danced across the room... The whistling of wind pierced a comfortable silence. “Tell me she’ll be okay!” Tarou barked at the nurses; a crack in his voice betraying his usual stoicism. Large, calloused hands softly entwined about his wife’s, offering some semblance of comfort. “She’ll live.” The hooded man intruded before kneeling next to the woman. A scream of pain that should have shot through the night was instead drowned by a terrible crash of thunder. ‘I don’t know what my first thought was… But it was surely cold.’ The troupe of Iryo-nin flocked to their patient as she shrieked and squirmed; she was giving birth. Suddenly, a striking emerald sheen shimmered outwards from Kei’s palms, and the sheer splendour of his chakra seized the sights of the surrounding shinobi. He brought his weathered hands to a hover above the writhing woman and she became buried in quiet colour... Screams turned to groans... Groans turned to silence… Silence. The soft, melodious hum of the Mystical Palm bathed the very air... A sharp wail struck the room like a tuneless chord. “It’s a boy.” Grumbled Kei, and the greenish gleam about his outstretched hands found itself scattered in thin streaks of fading brilliance. With a final and ferocious clap of thunder, the parting storm gave way to a deluge of rain. The heavy patter pounded against the crown of the tent, threatening to crash in. My father wrapped me tight in a rough fur blanket and laid me in the cradle of my mother’s arms. “Yoroi…” Edited March 7, 2020 by Tommy 5 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gogo 81 Posted March 3, 2020 well now thats kicking the door open gg 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bacchin 28 Posted March 3, 2020 Very nice. Word repetition and the implication of a narrator/flashback-type scenario gave me the impression of the first scene of a series. The images unfolded in my mind, continuously multiplying in both detail and vibrancy until I might as well have been in a movie theater, a warm tub of popcorn in my lap and my right hand around a chilled, over-sized cup of more-ice-than-soda. Kudos, Tommy. ^-^ 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tommy 18 Posted March 3, 2020 11 hours ago, Gogo said: well now thats kicking the door open gg Happy to pay for any damages. 2 hours ago, Batrachomy said: Kudos, Tommy. ^-^ Thanks, Batra. More-ice-than-soda is the worst. 0 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sad Test Creature 93 Posted March 3, 2020 (edited) 3 hours ago, Tommy said: Happy to pay for any damages. Thanks, Batra. More-ice-than-soda is the worst. No-ice-only-soda is the best nice thang btw Edited March 3, 2020 by Aetherweaver 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Tommy 18 Posted March 4, 2020 19 hours ago, BloodyDoll said: Well I can't say anything other than.. well yes.. that is literally the beginning. I hoped for something more adventurous, but right now i'm just happy to see baby Yoroi being born. :3 Hopefully I’ll have a more “adventurous” story up tonight! Baby Yoroi says hi. 0 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
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